cherry petals fall
sitting alone on park bench
so much left unsaid
Written for Carpe Diem #1652 Cherry Petals (modern kigo)
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Longing For Water 
Excellent.
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Thanks.
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Great! 🙂
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Very nicely crafted haiku. Your 2nd line reads a bit unnatural, but maybe that’s because you follow the classical rule of 5-7-5 syllables. Maybe it’s an idea to change your line “sitting alone on park bench” into “sitting alone on a park bench”.
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Does sound more natural. Working on rule-breaking.
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